The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.
The line
chart
compares the amount of time migrants to the UK wanted to stay over an
8 year
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period.
Moreoever
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Moreover
, the pie
chart
illustrates why
people
decided to immigrate in the year
of
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2008. In the line
chart
, we can see
although
the number of
people
who intended to stay for less than two years was stable for the first two years, it rose and became the
most
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favourite option for immigrants.
Also
in the pie
chart
, work was stated as the main reason for immigration. In the year 2000,
people
who migrated for a shorter period of time had the same figure as the
long term
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migrants; both roughly at 150
thousand
people
,
while
a little over 50
thousand
people
wanted to stay between 2 to 4 years.
Short term
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immigrants began to increase in 2001 and rose to almost 250
thousand
people
in 2004 and stayed at the same figure since
then
.
However
, the number of
people
in the other two groups almost did not change,
mid term
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migrants' figure fluctuated and
finally
, increased to 100
thousand
people
in 2008. In the second
chart
, it is shown that work and studying combined for merely 70
percent
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per cent
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of the reasons for immigration in 2008; 38
percent
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per cent
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of which is accounted by work to be
percise
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precise
.
People
who wanted to join their family were the third most prevalent with 16
percent
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while
the remaining 14
precent
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per cent
was split up between
people
who chose other reasons or, did not want to answer
this
question.
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