Some children Spend hours every day on their smartphones.Why is this case? Do you think this is positive or a negative development?
Technology is increasing with many electronic items
are
Wrong verb form
being
inovated
in our world.Correct your spelling
innovated
Smartphones
and digital electronic diveces
are very demanding among People.Correct your spelling
devices
Accordingly
, the
most Correct article usage
apply
children
are spending more times
with their Fix the agreement mistake
time
smartphones
. That is
huge
problem for society. I will discuss the topic Add an article
a huge
why is
Verb problem
of
this
case and I give my opinion.
On the one hand, in the
modern Correct article usage
apply
society
people are using many electronic devices Add a comma
,society
such
as computers, laptops, smartphones
, Smart watches
and different Correct your spelling
Smartwatches
kind
of digital items. Especially, Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
Smartphones
are rapidly spread
in our world. Today Wrong verb form
spreading
variety
of Add an article
a variety
the variety
mobiles
Change the noun form
mobile
phones
upbriging
in Correct your spelling
upbringing
the
society.Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
,more children
are addicting
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addicted
for
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to
mobil
Correct your spelling
mobile
phones
.That is
huge
problem in our community.Add an article
a huge
Therefore
, children
mind is Change noun form
children's
destroying
and they are facing for health issues.
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destroyed
On the other hand
, I believe that,
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apply
Children
is
using mobile Correct subject-verb agreement
are
phones
. Then
expanding
negative development from Wrong verb form
it expands
kids
. Firstly
, these days the
most parents are buying Correct article usage
apply
smartphones
for their children
because more kids
like to use mobile phones
. Nowadays it is a trend in our world.Alihrough
,Correct your spelling
Although
children
are playing
games, Wrong verb form
play
watching
cartoons Correct word choice
and watching
in
mobile Change preposition
on
phones
.They are addicting.Therefore
they are like
to Correct your spelling
likely
living
alone and Wrong verb form
live
children
are separating
from their families.Wrong verb form
separated
secondly
, some kids
are misusing phones
because they are watching bad vedioes
through the internet. Correct your spelling
videos
That is
negative
development for our Add an article
a negative
children
. However
, children
mind is Change noun form
children's
destroying
and their skills,Wrong verb form
destroyed
knowledge
Correct word choice
and knowledge
extication
Correct your spelling
extrication
excitation
extraction
due to
mobile phones
. Another thing, children
are facing for
health problems Change preposition
apply
such
as stress, eye issues, increasing
obesity as well. There are a lot of negative developments Correct word choice
and increasing
growth
with Correct word choice
and growth
smartphones
.
In conclusion, I assume that,
mobile Remove the comma
apply
phones
are bad electronical
Correct your spelling
electronic
device
for Fix the agreement mistake
devices
children
. Therefore
, kids
are distancing in
their families Change preposition
from
as well as
knowledge and skills reducing
. I do not recommend mobile Verb problem
apply
phones
for children
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