An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays
poeple
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people
have a tendency to become more flawless
with
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by
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doing
surgery
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and using
cosmetic
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cosmetics
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in order to satisfy themselves to keep
good looking
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good-looking
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. I
personaly
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personally
think
this
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is a negative development since
it
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costly and sometimes could be
harmfull
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harmful
. The main reason people end up in beauty
clinic
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clinics
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and having
surgery
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mostly
because
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that
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they do not feel
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confidence
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with their self.
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result
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they find information and end up in
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surgery
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the surgery
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room even
they
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though they
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have to pay
much
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apply
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money.
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,
well known
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American actress Madonna is the one who always had
a
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apply
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surgery
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because she felt not
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confidence
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confident
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in
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on
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stage.
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, she
also
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suffer
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with negative
effect
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effects
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of the operation affected to her health even
end
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ending
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in death.
On the other hand
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, ordinary people nowadays
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also
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are also
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influenced by
this
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trend and consume
import
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imported
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cosmetic
product
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products
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, even
go
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going
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overseas to have
operation
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operations
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.
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is because they want to imitate their favourite actor or actress
in
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on
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TV. Typically they collect all
information
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the information
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and
going to
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apply
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have
same
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the same
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treatment in
exact
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the exact
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place in order to obtain similar
result
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results
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. One real example could be seen from the fans of Korean
actress
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actresses
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,
usually
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,usually
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they go to Korea just to have
the
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apply
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surgery
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and buy the cosmetic.
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, they
also
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spend
to
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too
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much money since the price is higher.
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, lack of
confidence
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become
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becomes
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the main reason change their appearance even
they
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if they
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have to pay higher than usual.
In Addition
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, having
self
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self-confidence
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confidence
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is beneficial to prevent
our selves
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ourselves
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getting
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from getting
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enganged
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engaged
in negative things
such
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as
have
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having
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palstic
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plastic
surgery
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Idealized beauty standards
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Advancements in medical technology
  • Socially acceptable
  • Self-improvement
  • Psychological well-being
  • Competitive workforce
  • Youthful appearance
  • Body dysmorphic disorder (BDD)
  • Physical appearance
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