As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more jobs. Describe some jobs positions that may be costly because of computers and discuss at one problem that may result.

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As each and every moment passes by, there may be some or the other whether it is major or minor technological advancements taking place in the world. With all the development in the field of artificial intelligence,
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work force
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is
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replaced by computers resulting in the loss of employment. In
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throw light on
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its possible drawbacks. To commence with every advancement in
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field is an achievement for
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mind. It is quite obvious that
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technological advancements are made for better facilities or better quality in
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of products.
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, the main aim of the advancement is to reduce
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human efforts which ultimately lead to the removal of manual inputs of workers resulting in unemployment. One
such
example of
this
particular scenario would be that, in the factories producing eatables,
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were required
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ingredients,
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them into
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and later on for packing but with the advent of machinery now only one person is required to handle an automated computer which operate all the machines and perform all the task involved in production.
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applied sciences, in
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the automotive field is
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getting the taste of artificial intelligence.
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it was the invention of
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car
now it is the invention of
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the driverless
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car
.
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benefit of undergoing no physical stress
while
driving. As we are aware of the fact that it is in the dark where candles shine the most and not in the light,
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situation has its own demerits. For
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into consideration, if a driverless
car
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from the roadside playground & Children
for instance
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the road to collect it. The sensors and the camera of the
car
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another vehicle in front but not about the child which may lead to a major accident,
whereas
in the case of humans, the individual could easily avoid the misfortune by applying breaks. Conclusively, with the rapid growth of mechanization being the need of the hour, it has its plausible cons. The use of these technologies could be too limited
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like factories and warehouses where there might be a risk of human injury,
whereas
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places the human touch is necessary.
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technological advancement should be restricted to a particular limit maintaining a balance of employment
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