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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given plans illustrate the southwest of the
airport
 now and after
development
 next year.
Firstly
, facing the departures before
development
 there is check-in on the left
side
 and
the
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 right
side
 there is
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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. But, after
development
the
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airport
 to access the departures there will be one new change which is
bag
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a bag
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 drop on the left
side
 in front of security
passport
control
.
Moreover
, the
check in
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check-in
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 will be switching sides to the right
side
instead
 of
left
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the left
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, and a
cafe
 will be on
left
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the left
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side
 down the corner.
Additionally
, by going through the security
passport
control
travelers
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travellers
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 will face
walkway
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the walkway
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 directly and eight gates.
However
, after updating the
airport
 in the next year, with going through the security
passport
control
travelers
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travellers
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 will face shops,
new
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a new
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 sky train and 18 gates.
Finally
, the arrivals people will not see
kind
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the kind
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 of facilities when finishing from the
passport
control
 customs, whilst after
development
the arrivals people
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the people of the arrival
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 when they finish from
passport
control
 customs there will be three new things
such
 as
,
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apply
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cafe
, ATM and car hire.
Overall
, the new
airport
 after
development
 will
be
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have
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 more gates,
long
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a long
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 sky train and more facilities.
Furthermore
, check-in and
cafe
 changed sides.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, development, side, cafe, passport, control with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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