More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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At present, most of the public prefers to attend office from their
home
instead
of the workplace.
According to
some individuals,
this
phenomenon acts as a beneficence both for the employees and their family members
while
others believe that
this
creates harm in the family. I partially agree with
this
statement because though the opportunity
for attending
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office from
home
mostly acts positively on working mothers, it sometimes acts as a drawback to the performance and health of the people. It is imperative that, at present both men and women equally contribute to the economy
therefore
, providing convenient working facilities and environments is essential in the corporate world. If employees are allowed to perform from
home
which has become a popular term as "work from
home
", that might help them to perform better and effectively. Most of the employees,
for example
, who are working mothers could easily balance their household chores, childbearing and working life if they are permitted to work from
home
.
Furthermore
, those who are working from
home
can easily do some overtime to earn extra money.
Hence
, because of these facilities, working from
home
could enhance the productivity and performance of people.
Although
working from
home
benefits
especially
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, especially
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women, it somehow affects public health.
For example
, if people come out from
home
, and commute to the workplace, they can access the fresh air and walk
while
capturing public transport.
This
could help them to exercise for a short period of time and provide them with a change which is necessary to erase the daily monotony of life.
Moreover
, working from
home
requires silence and a calm environment to concentrate and focus which might not always be available in the
home
.
As a result
, it could breach the confidentiality of the organization.
For example
, if any child or any patient is present in the
home
this
maintenance would not be possible.
To conclude
, working from
home
is somehow beneficial to others
however
, it sometimes does harm to the privacy of the organization and productivity of the workers. But there is no doubt that it is a blessing for working mothers.
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