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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future, all types of transportation will be self-driving. Anyway, people will be passengers
while
traveling
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travelling
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 inside the
vehicles
. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
advantages
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the advantages
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 of driverless overshadow the disadvantages.
Firstly
, nowadays electric
vehicles
 are becoming more popular than before.
However
, now people are trying to buy an electric vehicle
instead
 of normal cars. Because patrols are becoming more
expansive
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expensive
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and
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apply
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especially
big
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for big
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vehicles
such
 as
,
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 buses and trucks.
For example
, my father pays almost 780 a month for his
car
 oil. After that, he bought an electric
car
 to save that money.
In addition
, electric
vehicles
 are saving the environment and population. What I mean
that
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is that
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 automatic
vehicles
 do not
blow-up
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blow up
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 dirty air
such
 as normal transportation.
Finally
, driverless
vehicles
 are
much
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very
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 helpful
it
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they
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 can drive
while
person
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a person
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 sitting next to
it
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them
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.
For instance
,
while
 the
car
 is driving by itself.
Consequently
, I can watch a movie or
browsing
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 on
the
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social media,
while
 I'm
passenger
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a passenger
the passenger
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. The positive
sides
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side
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, electric
vehicles
could
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can
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 travel by
itself
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themselves
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 for long
distance
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distances
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. Because traveling far away the vehicle wheels might explode, and
this
 makes harmful accented.
For example
, my friend Mike
traveled
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travelled
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 from Riyadh to Qatar
on
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in
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electric
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an electric
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car
,
whilst
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and whilst
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 the
car
 was driving itself the two
backs
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back
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 wheels
explode
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exploded
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. Sadly, Mike could not control the
car
, so the
car
was
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crashed into the trees.
Thats
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That's
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 why electric
vehicles
 should be that big of trust. In conclusion, driverless
vehicles
 are more beneficial. In my opinion,
this
 generation is all about technology developments.
Nonetheless
, automatic
vehicles
become
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 with
a
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perfect timing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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