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When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a goor thing or bad thing?

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impression
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huge
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 impact on
someone
's judgemental
idea
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. It is human nature to judge
someone
 on
very
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the very
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first
 meeting and give
the
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 idea about the personality of the
person
.
According to
 my point of view, it is not good to give your reviews on
someone
's personality by seeing somebody only once. As mentioned before, judging anyone on
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first
 site is always not beneficial because the
person
's behaviour
get
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 changed
everyday
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according to
 the occasion, environment and the situations going on in
someone
's life. So, if we
seeing
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 the
person
 on his worst day, It is not the right time to give
the
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 statement regarding the personality of
someone
.
Apart from
this
, in today's world'
majority
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 of
people
suffering
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 from too many responsibilities and conflicts
along with
 the burden of
modern
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 lifestyle. So, we all should have to be careful about the way we treat
people
 in
everyday's
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 life. We cannot like or dislike
person
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a person
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 as we see them the
first
 time.
Moreover
, we reflect our own
personlity
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personality
 as well when we make
coversation
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conversation
 with anyone. So,
people
 treat us as they see our attitude towards them.
Hence
, it is always not
someone
 else's fault if they
showing
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 you
different
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a different
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 kind of behaviour. So,
thw
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the
 youth always have to focus on their own attitude as well before judging somebody else. In conclusion,
people
 must concentrate on their own behaviour
while
 judging
someone
 else.
Also
, we
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should
shoukd
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should
 take time before liking or disliking
someone
 as it is not
easy
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 process to rush
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