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Some people think that most of the world’s problems are caused by overpopulation. Do you agree or disagree?

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The human
population
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 burst a growth in numbers in the recent century. Some people argue that the biggest problems that exist in the
world
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 today are brought about by the excessive human
population
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. It is my firm belief that
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 overpopulation has some solid shortcomings, other sources of problems radiate twice the severity compared to others.
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 with, in my view, a few major dilemmas are the repercussions of an uncontrolled rise in the number of humans. Overpopulation is a notorious stressor that disrupts some of the most fragile areas in the
world
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. First of all, it is utterly important to acknowledge the fact that the earth's resources are scarce and these resources are likely to continue diminishing in the future.
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, as a part of a chain reaction under the earth's atmosphere, the number of problems owing to
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 congestion will flourish and diversify across the different areas ranging from catastrophic impact on CO2 emissions
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 to plastic disposal, and deforestation. Despite the fact that excessive
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 has long-lasting effects on
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 the majority of main threats to the
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 are not related to it whatsoever.
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,
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 scientific research conducted by scientists, the
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population
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 is estimated to increase negligibly until 2050, before stalling in numbers. Interestingly, many people now begin to realize that
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 negative trend should
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 be treated as a threat to the existence of the human race.
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, regardless of the number of disadvantages that have arisen
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 overpopulation, it has become a formidable hurdle for humanity.
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, alternatives
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 as global warming and COVID-19 have even far-reaching impacts on Earth.
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