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The chart below shoes the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shoes the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the ratio of
households
 who owned or rented accommodation in the UK and Wales
during
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from
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 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, the
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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 who owned accommodation increased over time with the highest percentage in 2001. Rented properties of cause running in the opposite way in a downward trend with
also
 the lowest proportion in 2001. In 1918, there is only less than 25% of
households
living
Wrong verb form
lived
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 in an owned accommodation which is
also
 the lowest proportion
among
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in
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 the years. The number of
households
 that owned properties
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 over time and hit
the
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a
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 peak in 2001 with around 70% of
households
 owning their own property. It
goes
Wrong verb form
went
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 down slightly to around 64
percent
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per cent
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 in 2011.
In contrast
, people who rented properties are going
down slope
Correct your spelling
downhill
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 during the years. The highest proportion is in 1918 with more than
three quarters
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three-quarters
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 of people renting a property
instead
 of owning one. It
reaches
Wrong verb form
reached
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 its lowest percentage in 2001 with only around 30
percent
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per cent
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 of
households
 renting a property.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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