In many countries, imprisonment is the most common solution to crime. However, some people believe that better education will be effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Imprisonment is considered one of the best
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to stop
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education
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better citizen.
Crimes
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employment
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quality
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education
will help them to secure a job after
education
.
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,
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a platform for people where they get to interact with other serious offenders that motivate them to commit even more serious
crimes
.
On the other hand
, some
crimes
have nothing to do with
education
since some
crimes
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to be within the boundaries so that
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cannot harm anyone
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else
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serious killer if they
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free.
To conclude
, undoubtedly,
education
plays an important role in building one's character,
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, sometimes
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education
fails to define someone's character, so I agree that sight of fear is required.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recidivism
  • Rehabilitation
  • Deterrent
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Social inclusion
  • Crime prevention
  • Penal system
  • Reoffending rates
  • Restorative justice
  • Societal norms
  • Economic disparity
  • Educational disparity
  • Delinquency
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Correlation vs causation
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