The line graph below show the average monthly temperatures in three major cities

The line graph shows the

temperature

of three major cities in

Celsius

through out

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the whole year.

Overall

, the

temperature

of

Dubai

is significantly higher during the middle of the year than

Paris

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,

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and

Sydney

. One

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of

this

is because they are

in

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different continents. Interestingly, the

temperature

in

Sydney

is lower than the others during July . In

Paris

, the

temperature

during the beginning of the year is very low

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to

Sydney

which is extremely high with

Dubai

in the middle of both , accounting for 5, 25 and 20 in order. The

temperature

of

Paris

continues to rise

while

Sydney

continues to drop. It at July when both start to change with

Sydney

’s

temperature

starting to rise and

Paris

’

temperature

starting to drop. Unlike

Dubai

, which keeps getting hotter and hotter and does not ever go down to 15

degrees

Celsius

but is only at

the

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least

of

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19

degrees

Celsius

. When the other cities get hotter

Dubai

is the hottest at 36

degrees

Celsius

while

Paris

,

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and

Sydney

are only at the most

of

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20 and 24

degrees

Celsius

respectively. Despite the

temperature

Sydney

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in Sydney

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when the others are hot, it gets colder

due to

being on different poles

on

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the globe.