The line graph below show the average monthly temperatures in three major cities

The line graph shows the

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of three major cities in

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through out

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the whole year.

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, the

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of

Dubai

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is significantly higher during the middle of the year than

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Paris

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in Paris

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and

Sydney

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. One

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is because they are

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different continents. Interestingly, the

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in

Sydney

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is lower than the others during July . In

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, the

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during the beginning of the year is very low

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to

Sydney

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which is extremely high with

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in the middle of both , accounting for 5, 25 and 20 in order. The

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of

Paris

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continues to rise

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Sydney

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continues to drop. It at July when both start to change with

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’s

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starting to rise and

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’

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starting to drop. Unlike

Dubai

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, which keeps getting hotter and hotter and does not ever go down to 15

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but is only at

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least

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19

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. When the other cities get hotter

Dubai

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is the hottest at 36

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while

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Paris

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and

Sydney

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are only at the most

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20 and 24

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respectively. Despite the

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Sydney

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in Sydney

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when the others are hot, it gets colder

due to

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being on different poles

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the globe.