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The supplied chart provides the international students graduate rates in Canadian universities from 2001 to 2006.

The supplied chart provides the international students graduate rates in Canadian universities from 2001 to 2006.
The display chart describes the international
students
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student's
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 graduate rates in Canadian
universities
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 from 2001 to 2006. There are 8
universities
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. The data is on the international
students
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student's
students'
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 graduate rates in Canadian
universities
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. In the year 2001
as well as
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 2006, in New Brunswick there were around 7% and more than 10% , Nova
Sctoia
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Scotia
 there were 6% and 11%, Quebec there were
neraly
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nearly
 6% and 7%, Alberta there were around 5% and 5%, British Columbia there were great different with 5% and 10%, Manitoba there were 4%
as well as
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 6%, New
foundland
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found land
Newfoundland
 and Labrador there were 4% and 7% and Ontario there were 4%
as well as
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 6%.
To conclude
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, the above information provides the international student graduate rate in Canadian
universities
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 from the year 2001 to 2006. There are 8
universities
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 they are New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, Quebec, Alberta, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador
as well as
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 Ontario.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words universities with synonyms.
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