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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society

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There is no doubt that these days there are a lot of people who think that social networking
apps
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 have a detrimental side on both individuals and society.
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, I believe that these
sites
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 have many
benefits
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 for individuals and communities. In
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 ,essay I am going to discuss the positive effects of social networking
sites
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. First of all, social
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 are very essential part of sellers, where they can show their goods on these
apps
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.These
sites
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 assist them in developing their business.Personally, I have now a project on perfumes and I take photos of them and share them on several social media
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 as Snapchat, and during these ,
sites
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 many people support me and take some of my perfumes.
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, Social
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 make
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business very easy for buyers to see different goods and buy whatever they want. The second effect is that there are many
apps
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 on social media that have more
benefits
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 and information that one can search for the topic he wants. During these
sites
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 the person can improve himself
for example
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 there are some
apps
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 to learn English. In my experience when I uploaded the 6mins app, I benefited greatly and gained experience in the reading section. To summarize, we could say that there are many
benefits
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 in social
sites
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 for both individuals and communities and some of them are important for society they can buy from sellers through these
apps
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 where the individual can learn individually and take more
benefits
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 and information from these
sites
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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