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Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #action #shortages #cities
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It is often argued that Actions from the
government
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 are the only way that solve the housing shortage issues in big cities.
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, there are many other circumstances which would affect the housing
market
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, I believe actions from the leadership find a faster solution for accommodation-related issues. On the one hand, Authoritative steps can prevent the housing
crisis
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 in metropolitan areas since action
from
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them
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needs to be followed by everyone.
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, By introducing residential beneficial schemes the
government
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 should make entry into the housing
market
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 to construct homes which creates a strike that balances supply and demand in the houses. On top of that, People elected entities should be vigilant to deal with any unprecedented or unexpected fluctuations in housing prices.
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, In Hyderabad, Since, most of the housing
market
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 is controlled by the
government
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, we hardly see any terrible
crisis
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 in the
market
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.
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, As it is considerably dependent on the global
market
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 and
due to
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 several factors the
crisis
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 can take birth. Because of the higher interest rates and less purchasing power people are more hesitant to buy a house or build a house which may cause a shortage in supply. Only making blame on the
government
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 does not help in rectifying the housing
crisis
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.
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, though I agree If the
government
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 starts introducing housing-beneficial schemes which make the housing
crisis
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 less severe, Still, I believe, It can
also
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 experience vulnerability
due to
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 terrible global economic conditions and many other factors.
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