Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
Social media
such
as Facebook is believed to have a harmful effect on people
and in turn, on the community as a whole. In my opinion, social media can portray a perfect life and spread a lot
of false information
which can affect individuals and society in a negative way.
The internet can be deleterious to individuals in many ways. Social media is one such
place which is pushing teenagers and young adults into numerous mental health problems. Influencers and celebrities on such
sites
often present only positive aspects of their lives which can include their wins or their career progress. But rarely do they show their hard work and the kind of obstacles they had to pass before achieving that status or position in their lives. Youngsters, being naïve, fall into this
trap, thinking that they might not be working hard enough or worthy of better things and often end up in depression and low self-esteem issues. For instance
, reports show that a lot
of college students, unable to live up to the false standards set by these sites
, end up committing suicide.
Such
sites
can have a bad impact on society too as they spread a lot
of false information
. Elderly people
tend to believe everything on the internet and can fall for sites
demanding personal information
, which can sometimes cost their lives. Furthermore
, this
can alarm people
unnecessarily, leading to a lot
of chaos and confusion. Overall
, such
rumours can waste people
's time and end up decreasing their productivity. For example
, fake information
that a popular instant noodles brand called ‘Maggi’ contains traces of the element Lead has caused it to shut down its sales which was a huge loss for the company.
In conclusion, social networking can prove to be bad for individuals as it causes them a lot
of mental health issues and can be detrimental to society too as it can disturb the harmony of a community.Submitted by aishvaryaaishu205 on
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Task Response
Make sure to clearly state your position on whether you agree or disagree with the given statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay. Make sure the flow of ideas is clear and coherent.
Lexical Resource
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Grammatical Range
Review your grammar to ensure accurate and grammatically correct sentences throughout the essay.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
