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some people think that women are generally more peaceful the men as their characters are naturally more aggressive. To what extend do you agree with this?

#people #women #men #characters
Day to day latest updates on
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surrounding
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used
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 to
receive
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 through various modes of
channel
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. It is believed by
few
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a few
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 individuals that
authenticity
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 of
news
that
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published by
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reporters
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also
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is also
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 questionable.
This
 essay will discuss the person
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who should
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 keep faith in the
news
 presenter and
also
 discuss certain outstanding skills of a perfect journalist.
Firstly
,
Journalist
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Journalists
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 releasing
news
 based on actual
incident
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incidents
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follow
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 closely
under
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the rules and regulations of
broadcast
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the broadcast
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 media act. To explain it
further
,
any
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news
 agencies
always
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are always
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 closely monitored by
government
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department
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 and
published
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publish
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 the
new
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news
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 with
disclaimer
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a disclaimer
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 that reporting from
site
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the site
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 of
incident
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the incident
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 occurred.
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,
Recent
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a Recent
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 critical rail accident in India about
collision
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the collision
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 of 3 rails caused major
fatality
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fatalities
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 and major injuries to
traveler
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travelers
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, later was
idenitified
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identified
 and confirmed
from
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by
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 govt
news
 agencies.
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 to
second
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 question, a presenter should acquire certain traits majorly
like
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as
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 moral values,
ethics
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and ethics
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 and have
qualification
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qualifications
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 to meet responsibility towards
community
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the community
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.
In addition
, a person related to
particular
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 channel must be modest, bold, courageous, soft but
fact spoken
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 and act against the wrong practices.
Further
 to
above
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the above
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 qualities, a reporter must be
real
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a real
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 patriot, who can able to feel the pain and sensitivity of matter so
not
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as not
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 to deviate from
reality
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the reality
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 of information.
To sum up
, it can be commented that
public
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the public
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 can trust
on
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correspondent
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correspondents
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, who have developed and gained
the
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certain positions over the period.
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