The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries? You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.

Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries?

You should write at least 150 words.
The display table provides information on social
as well as
economic indicators for 4 nations in the year 1994,
according to
United Nations statistics.
Canada
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Canadian
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indicators, in annual
income
per
person
in the $
US
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,US
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is 11100, in
life
expectancy
at
birth
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,birth
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is 76, in daily
calorie
ssupply
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supply
per
person
is 3326 and in
adult
literacy
rate
is
in
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apply
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99%. In Japan,
annual
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the annual
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income
per
person
in $
US
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the US
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is 15760,
life
expectancy
at
birth
is 78, in daily
calorie
supply per
person
is 2846 and in
adult
literacy
rate
is
in
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apply
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99%. In Peru,
annual
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the annual
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income
per
person
is 160,
life
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the life
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expectancy
at
birth
is 51,
in
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apply
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daily
calorie
supply per
person
is 1927 and
adult
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the adult
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literacy
rate
in
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is
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68%
. .
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.
...
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In Zaire, in annual
income
per
person
is 130, in
life
expectancy
at
birth
is 47, in daily
calorie
is
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supply per
person
is 1749 and
adult
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the adult
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literacy
rate
is 34%.
To conclude
, the above data describes indicators of Canada, Japan, Peru
as well
as
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and
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Zaire in the year 1994.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, person, life, expectancy, birth, calorie, adult, literacy, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • indicators
  • population
  • GDP per capita
  • life expectancy
  • literacy rate
  • infant mortality rate
  • prosperous
  • less developed
  • level of education
  • healthcare
  • improvements
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