With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

Nowadays it is more common
this
problem in many countries. There are
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of major causes
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there to spend
money
than spending
money
on
space
exploration. I support
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this
view and the following paragraphs will discuss
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it.
Firstly
, governments use
people
's
money
to explore
the
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space
which is my main concern. Other than
people
’s
money
they do not have sufficient funds for
this
in their budget. Most of the countries suffering from poverty,
for instance
, some
people
do not have enough food, shelters and some developing countries nations do not have good education. These kinds of major problems we can point out for the governments to reduce their unnecessary expense on searching another planet or alien. Spending on
space
explore
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is not a not a small task, they want to experience astronaut
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, rockets,
space
shuttles, experience employees
and
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etc. Sometimes they sped for those things
unexpectable
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amount of public funds.
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of
this
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they
cloud
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not step out of
the
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poverty.
Moreover
, the public will
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their trust
of
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the government which will lead to dissatisfaction nation.
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people
bring them to
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power for their safety in future but if the government does not care about it will
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big damage
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their image and next time they will not have a chance to come to
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power. So,
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they need to fulfill
people
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requirements before going
space
exploration. In conclusion,
it is clear that
spending
money
on
space
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exploring
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is
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totally
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waste
while
governments have to solve major problems in their nations. My idea is we have enough
space
to live what we want to do is need to increase the quality of life of
public
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instead
of searching different planets and aliens.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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