With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.
Nowadays it is more common
this
problem in many countries. There are lot
of major causes Change the article
a lot
are
there to spend Correct pronoun usage
that are
money
than spending money
on space
exploration. I support for
Change preposition
apply
this
view and the following paragraphs will discuss about
it. Remove the preposition
apply
Firstly
, governments use people
's money
to explore the
Correct article usage
apply
space
which is my main concern. Other than people
’s money
they do not have sufficient funds for this
in their budget. Most of the countries suffering from poverty, for instance
, some people
do not have enough food, shelters and some developing countries nations do not have good education. These kinds of major problems we can point out for the governments to reduce their unnecessary expense on searching another planet or alien. Spending on space
explore
is not a not a small task, they want to experience astronaut Replace the word
exploration
team
, rockets, Fix the agreement mistake
teams
space
shuttles, experience employees and
etc. Sometimes they sped for those things Correct word choice
apply
unexpectable
amount of public funds. Add an article
the unexpectable
As a result
of this
they Add a comma
this,
cloud
not step out of Verb problem
could
the
poverty. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, the public will lost
their trust Change the verb form
lose
be lost
of
the government which will lead to dissatisfaction nation. Change preposition
in
Because
Correct word choice
People
people
bring them to the
power for their safety in future but if the government does not care about it will Correct article usage
apply
makes
big damage Verb problem
cause
for
their image and next time they will not have a chance to come to Change preposition
to
the
power. So, Correct article usage
apply
first
they need to fulfill Add a comma
first,
people
requirements before going Change noun form
people's
space
exploration. In conclusion, it is clear that
spending money
on space
Replace the word
exploration
exploring
is Replace the word
exploration
Correct article usage
a totally
Correct article usage
a totally
Change the word
total
totally
waste Replace the word
total
while
governments have to solve major problems in their nations. My idea is we have enough space
to live what we want to do is need to increase the quality of life of public
Correct article usage
the public
instead
of searching different planets and aliens.Submitted by piuymi.madu on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion