According to a recent study, the more 3me people use the Internet, the less 3me they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communica3on possibili3es world- wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interac3on. How far do you agree with this opinion?

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Spending on

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internet

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is a more common concern nowadays.

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this

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statement,

people

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use the

internet

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to communicate with

people

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the most,

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they do not have 3me to

interac3on

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interact

with human beings in real life.

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internet

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gives us more benefits than

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concern. I agree with

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statement and I will discuss it

further

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essay. It is so true that the

internet

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gives global

communica3on

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communication

methods to everyone who is around the world because before the

internet

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people

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used to communicate

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by mails

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mails

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and

telephones

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. It took

long

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3me and

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amount of money but nowadays anybody can communicate with anyone in the world

any3me

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any 3me

even having live video calls.

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, Facebook, WhatsApp,

snapchat

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, etc. The

internet

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has enhanced the world's

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communication

methods surprisingly

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it has numerous ways to explore things. Nobody can limit

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access knowledge,

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Youtube

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YouTube

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Chrome

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and Chrome

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provide various methods for everyone who

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likes

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to learn new things and communicate with others.

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we can not say the

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has

bad

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effect on

people

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, in

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decade more

people

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depend on the

internet

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and

some3mes

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sometimes

they do not have enough 3me to spend 3me with their families. Specially young

genera3on

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generation

used to communicate with their family and friends through

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internet

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Some3mes

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may be a fake

rela3onship

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relationship

because virtual

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communication

gives

the

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real impression than social media

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communication

. As an example, some

people

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do not have 3me to talk to their parents

even

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but

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the

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social media they are ac3vely communicate with others because of

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maKer their parents suffer a

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lot

. Honestly, I believe young

people

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depend

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apply

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the

internet

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is not a good sign

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the future.They should learn how to balance social life and

internet

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usage.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

296 words

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