According to a recent study, the more 3me people use the Internet, the less 3me they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communica3on possibili3es world- wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interac3on. How far do you agree with this opinion?

Spending on
internet
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is a more common concern nowadays.
According to
this
statement,
people
use the
internet
to communicate with
people
the most,
while
they do not have 3me to
interac3on
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interact
with human beings in real life.
However
,
internet
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gives us more benefits than
this
concern. I agree with
this
statement and I will discuss it
further
in
this
essay. It is so true that the
internet
gives global
communica3on
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communication
methods to everyone who is around the world because before the
internet
people
used to communicate
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mails
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and
telephones
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telephone
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. It took
long
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3me and
considerable
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amount of money but nowadays anybody can communicate with anyone in the world
any3me
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any 3me
even having live video calls.
For example
, Facebook, WhatsApp,
snapchat
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, etc. The
internet
has enhanced the world's
communica3on
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communication
methods surprisingly
as well as
it has numerous ways to explore things. Nobody can limit
to
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access knowledge,
for instance
,
Youtube
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YouTube
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,
Chrome
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and Chrome
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provide various methods for everyone who
like
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likes
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to learn new things and communicate with others.
Therefore
we can not say the
internet
has
bad
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effect on
people
.
However
, in
this
decade more
people
depend on the
internet
and
some3mes
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sometimes
they do not have enough 3me to spend 3me with their families. Specially young
genera3on
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generation
used to communicate with their family and friends through
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internet
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.
Some3mes
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Sometimes
it
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may be a fake
rela3onship
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relationship
because virtual
communica3on
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communication
gives
the
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real impression than social media
communica3on
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communication
. As an example, some
people
do not have 3me to talk to their parents
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but
in
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the
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social media they are ac3vely communicate with others because of
this
maKer their parents suffer a
lotpp
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lot
. Honestly, I believe young
people
depend
on
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more
in
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the
internet
.
This
is not a good sign
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the future.They should learn how to balance social life and
internet
usage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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