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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that businesses
trying
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 to
conform
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confirm
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 their products are brand new
on
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in
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 their ads.
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, in my
opinion
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 there are both positive and negative effects.
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,
while
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 emphasizing the brand
on
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in
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 ads it will
benefits
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 a lot of things. I mean when people are thinking
to buy
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of buying
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this
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product
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, they would be comfortable
and
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apply
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buying it directly without checking or
request
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requesting
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 questions
on
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about
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 it.
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, it helps
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businesses to access a huge number of earnings and credibility.
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, my small
bother
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brother
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 saw a doll for sale, with every detail on it. After that, he ordered the doll directly.
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, advertising any
product
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it
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apply
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should be a high-quality video so customers can buy it directly using the business
product
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 website.
In
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 the other side,
of
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despite
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 the negative effects there are
also
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 positive situations. Often, a tiny number of business companies
put
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use
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a
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recycled
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product
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products
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instead
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 of
brand new
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brand-new
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one
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ones
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. In fact, these kinds of companies are taking
a recycled products
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recycled products
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then
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and then
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try
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trying
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 to
sale
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sell
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it
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them
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 to
the
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poor people.
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, my grandmother bought a cooker machine from Samsung as a new
product
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 and
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while
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when
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, she arrived home she found that
this
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product
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is
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was
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 used!
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, the hand of the machine
in
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is
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 completely not working. In
case
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this case
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, people
be
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are
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 aware
from
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of
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the
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apply
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scams
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scam
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 companies
although
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 if the company is popular.
To sum up
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, ads may have benefits and earns.
Furthermore
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, it is easier to get all the customers.
However
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, to avoid scams folks must check the
product
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 before buying and get an invoice to be
guide
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a guide
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 if something
would happen
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happens
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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