The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The pictures illustrate the layout of a
park
built in 1920 and its current structure.
It is clear that
the arrangement of the different parts of the
park
have
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been changed extensively over time.
Also
, three new facilities including a cafe, car
park
and children’s play area have
added
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to the
park
. From the maps, the
last
version of the
park
, in comparison with the initial version, has experienced sweeping changes. The fountain and glasshouse created in 1920 have been removed from the
park
and the rose gardens and the seats have been relocated from the sides to the center of the
park
.
In addition
, the
amphitheater
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has been constructed as an alternative
for
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the stage for musicians. It can be seen from the pictures that several necessary facilities have been added to the
park
instead
of
old
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ones in
current
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structure.
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, the children’s play area, a café,
water
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feature and an underground car
park
have been replaced
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the
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pond for water plants and
glasshouse
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a glasshouse
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.
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  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
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