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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The pictures illustrate the layout of a
park
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 built in 1920 and its current structure.
It is clear that
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 the arrangement of the different parts of the
park
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have
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 been changed extensively over time.
Also
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, three new facilities including a cafe, car
park
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 and children’s play area have
added
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 to the
park
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. From the maps, the
last
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 version of the
park
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, in comparison with the initial version, has experienced sweeping changes. The fountain and glasshouse created in 1920 have been removed from the
park
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 and the rose gardens and the seats have been relocated from the sides to the center of the
park
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.
In addition
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, the
amphitheater
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 has been constructed as an alternative
for
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 the stage for musicians. It can be seen from the pictures that several necessary facilities have been added to the
park
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instead
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 of
old
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the old
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 ones in
current
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the current
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 structure.
For example
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, the children’s play area, a café,
water
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a water
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 feature and an underground car
park
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 have been replaced
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with the
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the
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a
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 pond for water plants and
glasshouse
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a glasshouse
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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