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some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#children #hours #smartphones #case #development
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the
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technology is developing these days,
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interests
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 of
children
sepending
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depending
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 growing significantly.Some
children
 devote a considerable amount of time on their
smartphones
 now.In
this
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 I will argue why
this
 happens and give reasons why the benefits of that overweight the drawbacks in spite of some potential risks. Excessive
use
 of
smartphones
 among
the
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children
 can bring about some serious drawbacks for them.They may face health problems by spending too much on
cellphones
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cell phones
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.Visual problems can be one of these downsides which can
weakened
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 the sight ability and make them
to
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use
 eyeglasses in future.Spending too much on cellphones might prevent them
to do
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 exercises which can be found essential for their body health by
strenghting
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strengthening
strengthing
 their muscles and bones.So they should avoid
spend
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 too much on them in order to prevent health troubles.
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,the
adventages
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advantages
 of using
cellphones
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cell phones
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 are
much
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 more.
This
 can make them more
intellegant
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intelligent
 and smarter by encouraging them to struggle with different options on
the
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smartphones
 and try to make
the
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use
 of them.
besides
,it helps them to be updated with the recent news throughout the world.
Therefore
,the more they
use
mobilephone
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mobile phones
,the smarter
the
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 may become. In my
opinion
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 encouraging
children
 to
use
smartphones
 can be a positive point.
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that
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why
this
 happened and how it can be useful for them.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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