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The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
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This
 report derives from the line graph, which illustrates the
consumption
 of fish and three different types of meals in a European country between 1979 and 2004. A good starting point would be to say that, the
number of
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consumption
 of beef experienced a considerable decline, which started from
first
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the first
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 placement and decreased to
second
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the second
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 over the years shown. Meanwhile, the
amount
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number
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 of people who preferred to eat chicken led the pack
at the end
 of
competition
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. The first result worth pointing out is that
,
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 chicken was not the most preferable meat in 1979, and the number of
consumption
 of
this
 was approximately 150
grams
 per person per week.
Then
, it experienced a rapid increase
,
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 and sat the first placement with nearly 250
grams
consumption
.
On the other hand
, beef started with a considerable gap with more than
slightly
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200
grams
, but
the
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things were not good for the beef in the following years. People’s preferences changed, and
its
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consumption
 fell by nearly 100
grams
 between the years given. Another piece of information that can be observed is that
,
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 the amount of
consumption
 of fish was relatively stable, which was nearly 50
grams
 between 1979 and 2004.
However
, lamb meat, which was the second preference of people with 150
grams
 in 1979, was not eaten by the people like in the past. Its
consumption
 decreased to nearly 60
grams
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • meat
  • increase
  • decrease
  • popularity
  • steady
  • stable
  • significant
  • period
  • type
  • contrast
  • decline
  • greatest
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