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It is always believed that globalization has both advantages as well as disadvantages. State prominent advantages as well as disadvantages in your opinion.

#globalization
Globalization
 is really a power with benefits and drawbacks.
This
 essay discuss both of basics, and
subsequently
 present my own idea. There are many advantages in
globalization
.
For example
 economic growth:
Globalization
 allows countries to expand their markets and access a larger customer base, leading to increased trade and economic growth. So it opens opportunities for businesses to expand internationally, resulting in job creation and higher incomes.
In addition
, it improves technical advancement:
Globalization
 facilities provide the transfer of technology and knowledge across the world.
Furthermore
 it promotes cultural exchange between nations, allowing people to learn about different traditions, and lifestyles.
This
 exchange creates greater understanding and harmony.
On the other hand
Globalization
 makes some disadvantages.  Environmental problems:
Globalization
 leads to increased production, transportation, and consumption.
As a result
 in pollution, deforestation, and loss of resources will be the biggest issue in the world.
Finally
 the loss of cultural identity: As global markets become more interconnected, there is risk of cultural erosion. People imitate each other's traditions, fashions, and clothes,
then
 they lost theirs. In conclusion, It is important to note that the advantages and disadvantages of
globalization
 can vary depending on perspectives and choices.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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