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Many large cities of world are changing their central parts into pedestrian zones

#cities #world #parts #zones
In the era of globalization, pedestrian
zones
 are becoming increasingly important in giant cities. It has its own merits
such
 as there will be lower pollution and fewer
accidents
.
However
,
such
 places might create increasing routes and
traffic
 jams.    The first merit of the pedestrian
zones
 is that there will be less pollution. Because the government imposes a rule on drivers not to drive in
such
 places. The next advantageous side is that there are fewer deadly
accidents
 than on other routes.
As a result
,
people
 can walk into their areas with their children without fear. In the
last
 5 years,
due to
 the fact that the Canadian government is building pedestrian
zones
,
accidents
 have decreased by 3 times.     These pedestrian
zones
 have disadvantages which as increasing the route. Before
people
 can drive a short distance, after building
zones
 they have to drive through the countryside. Another drawback of
this
 is that it increases
traffic
 congestion which is the main problem for drivers. It leads to
people
 not being able to reach their destination on time. During the
last
 decade, German
people
 have had to sit in cars because of
traffic
 jams.    Even though, pedestrian
zones
 are comfortable for individuals because will not suffer from pollution and
accidents
, they may create more routes and
traffic
 jams
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