The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Write a summery with 150 words

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

Write a summery with 150 words
The given bar chart illustrates the
number
of car trips that entered
to
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the town centre made by inhabitants and non-inhabitants.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,during the first four
years
,
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the highest
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highest
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the highest
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number
of trips
made
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was made
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by people who live in the city and after the parking meters had
introdused
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introduced
the trend became inverse till 2002.
while
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the
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in the
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last
three
years
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the figures
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figures
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the figures
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of
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both
categorry
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category
categories
reduced
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in drastically
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drastically
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in drastically
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compared to previous
years
.
To begin
with,The average
number
of journeys made by the community
were
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was
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between 9000
to
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and
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10000 during the first 4
years
,
while
the figures
of
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outsiders in 1996 ,
about
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were about
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5000 and increased slightly to just above 8000 in 1999.
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Furthermore
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,When parking meters
had
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were
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introduced in 2000,It
is
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was
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noticeble
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noticeable
that the amount of
citizens
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citizens'
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cars
reduced
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was reduced
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to under 5000
whereas
the non-citizens figures remained approximately
in
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the same amount (8000) until the
westgate
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street
and
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park lane closed to traffic
in
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the end of 2002.In the
last
three
years
number
of
motir
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motor
vehicles stayed
bellow
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below
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4000 except the average count of trips made by non-residents in 2005 went up to just below 5000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • car journeys
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • increase
  • years
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • difference
  • gap
  • widened
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