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The table provides information about the sources of police
budget
 in one area of Britain between 2017 and 2018.
However
, the pie chart illustrates the percentage of distributions of
this
budget
.
Overall
, the
budget
 increased during
this
 period.
Moreover
, in
both
years
 the highest provider of police
budget
was
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belong
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 to
National
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the National
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 Government and Local Taxes stood at the second level.
Furthermore
, in
both
years
, most of
budget
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the budget
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were
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was
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 consumed
for
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on
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 salaries and technology was the lowest consumer.
Also
, Building and transport had equal percentages. In 2017,
National
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the National
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 Government paid 175.5
m
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million
pound
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pounds
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,
while
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which
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 it increased by 2.3
m
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million
pound
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pounds
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 after a year.
In addition
, in these two
years
, Local taxes supplied 91.2
m
 and 102.3, respectively.
Moreover
, about 38
m
provided
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 from other sources in
both
years
. With regard to the pie chart, the figure for Salaries of officers and staff stood at 75% in the first year, after which it decreased by 6%. Meanwhile, 17% of
budget
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 was allocated to Technology which remained constant in
both
years
 and
budget
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the budget
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 for building and transport was 8% in 2017,
while
 it decreased by 6% in the second year.
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