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In some countries, more and moe people are becoming interesteed in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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The table provides information about the sources of police
budget
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 in one area of Britain between 2017 and 2018.
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, the pie chart illustrates the percentage of distributions of
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budget
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.
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, the
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 increased during
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 period.
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, in
both
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years
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 the highest provider of police
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was
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belong
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 to
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 Government and Local Taxes stood at the second level.
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, in
both
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years
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, most of
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budget
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were
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 consumed
for
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 salaries and technology was the lowest consumer.
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, Building and transport had equal percentages. In 2017,
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 Government paid 175.5
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m
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million
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,
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 it increased by 2.3
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m
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million
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 after a year.
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, in these two
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, Local taxes supplied 91.2
m
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 and 102.3, respectively.
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, about 38
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provided
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 from other sources in
both
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years
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. With regard to the pie chart, the figure for Salaries of officers and staff stood at 75% in the first year, after which it decreased by 6%. Meanwhile, 17% of
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budget
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 was allocated to Technology which remained constant in
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years
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 and
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budget
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 for building and transport was 8% in 2017,
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 it decreased by 6% in the second year.
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