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With the rise of e-books, come the decline in paper books . Some people see this ad a good forward step while others do not. What are advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#rise #e-books #decline #paper #books #people #ad #step #trend
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people
start
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have started
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 to use
e-
books
 rather than paper
books
 in their daily
life
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lives
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.
Although
 some
people
 support
usage
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the usage
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 of
e-
books
, others do not.
This
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benefits
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the benefits
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 and drawbacks of
increase
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an increase
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 in
usage
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the usage
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 of
e-
books
instead
 of paper
books
. Reading something from
e-book
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an e-book
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 has two main advantages.
Firstly
,
this devices
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this device
these devices
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is enviromentally
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enviromentally
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environmentally
 friendly and
reduce
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reduces
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carbon
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the carbon
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 footprints of
people
 .
While
 normal
books
needs
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need
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 to
build
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be built
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 from
papers
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paper
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 that
cause
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causes
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to
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apply
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de-forestration,
e-
books
made
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are made
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by
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with
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 more renewable resources like plastic and glass which
has
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have
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 a positive impact
to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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.
Secondly
, it
promote
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promotes
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reading
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the reading
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 habitat of
people
 because they can carry
this devices
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this device
these devices
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 easily to wherever they want and download various
books
 in seconds.
On the other hand
,
e-
books
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are harmfull
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harmfull
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harmful
for
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to
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eyes
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eye
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 health. Spending more than 30 minutes
in
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at
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close
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a close
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 distance with artificial light,
espacially
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especially
 blue light, cause
to
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hypermetroph
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hypertrophy
hypermetropia
 in
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the long-term
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long-term
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long term
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.
Also
, our
brain
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brains
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 do not adapt
itself
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themselves
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for
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to
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 extract knowledge from screens. From primary school, we
use
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used
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 to learn things using paper-based materials like
books
 and
dictionary
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dictionaries
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.
Last
researchs
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research
researches
shows
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show
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 that when
people
 try to learn new
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 from
electoronic
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electronic
 devices, they tend to forget things more and feel hard to memorise things from
study
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the study
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. In conclusion,
increase
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an increase
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 in
e-
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e-book
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books
 usage
for instance
 to
paper-
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books
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books
have
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has
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positive
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a positive
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 impact
to
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on
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 nature and
increase
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increases
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 reading habits
with
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by
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 being reacheble.
However
,
also
 it has some negative effects
to
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on
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 health and cognitive functions.
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