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Band 4

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money

#council #sports #leisure #centre #money
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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Mohammed Salih and I am writing to raise my concern regarding the plans to close our local
sports
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 and leisure
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center
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centre
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. It is hard to underestimate the importance of the
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center
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 for citizens, in fact, it
became
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 the point where we all
meat
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meet
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 each other to share some positive emotions and spend
free
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 time.
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, one cannot miss the influence of sporting activities provided there on the health of the people. My family is used to going to the
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center
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 several times a week. My husband and I attend fitness lessons for adults on Monday and Wednesday after work. My two sons went to the
center
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 after school, they
have
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 a place there to do their homework, to play with other children, and
relax
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 in
safe
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 environment. On weekends we usually meet friends there and go to the swimming pool or open-air tennis courts provided it does not rain cats and dogs. I can think of several negative consequences the closure of
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center
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do
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.
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, people could become less engaged in
sports
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 activities which will definitely affect their health.
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, children will lose the opportunity to spend their time in a healthy atmosphere and will spend more time
at
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 the street.
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, for the people interested in
sports
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 it will become more difficult to get to the place to exercise as the nearest
sports
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center
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 in Toronto
which
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is 50 miles away. I believe the question deserves close attention. Yours faithfully, Mohammed Salih
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