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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line graph illustrates the visitors
number
 in a selected Caribbean island from 2016 to 2017. Here, The
number
 of travellers
stayed
Correct pronoun usage
who stayed
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 on cruise ships witnessed a gradual rise with a slight decline where the tourists
stayed
Correct pronoun usage
who stayed
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 on
island
Correct article usage
the island
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 fluctuated and rose
subsequently
later
Rephrase
apply
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. The total
number
 didn't fall ever and showed a continuous rise with sharp growth later. The
number
 of visitors on cruise ships was about 25000 in 2010 and faced a slight increase next year and became 50,000.
Following
Correct article usage
The following
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 year with a slight
decrease
Add a comma
,decrease
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 It stood
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as
2011
Change preposition
in 2011
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 and started growing gradually. It never fell down lately and stood at 2
millions
Change to singular
million
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 in in 2017.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of travellers
stayed
Wrong verb form
staying
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 on
island
Correct article usage
the island
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waa
Correct your spelling
was
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near
Change the word
nearly
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to
Change preposition
apply
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75000 in 2010 and started rising after 2011 to 2013 and became 1.5
millions
Change to singular
million
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.
Afterward
Change the spelling
Afterwards
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, It was increased a bit and was fixed at 1.5
millions
Change to singular
million
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 same as from 2013 to 2016. The total
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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 of
treavellers
Correct your spelling
travellers
was
Change the verb form
were
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 always upward. From 2010 It started growing and
became
Verb problem
apply
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double
Replace the word
doubled
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at
Change preposition
in
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 just 3 years in 2013. I
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased
just
Change preposition
by just
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 under 3
millions
Change to singular
million
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 in 2015 and remained the same
to
Change preposition
in
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 2016. It soared in 2017 and stood at 3.5
millions
Change to singular
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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