The graph shows the number of girls and boys playing sport in an English town in 2012

The graph shows the number of girls and boys playing sport in an English town in 2012
The bar chart presents information about
boys
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boys'
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and
girls
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girls'
girl's
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preferences in playing six types of
sport
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sports
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activities in a British town in 2012. The main fact that stands out is that the
most
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favourite
sport
for
boys
was football
while
for
girls
it was swimming. Two types of
sport
attracted a bigger number of males, 60
boys
played football and 50 tennis.
While the
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least interesting
sport
was hockey, which was chosen by 15 children only. Badminton, cycling and swimming
was
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selected by a somewhat equal number of
boys
which was between 30 and 40.
On the other hand
, the highest number of
girls
, 50 people, chose swimming as their main
sport
activity. Tennis and badminton were selected by
almost
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equal amount of
girls
, 38 and 40 respectively. 20
girls
only were interested in cycling and football and hockey was the least interesting type of
sport
,
hence
only 9
girls
were playing it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, sport with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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