You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, say that life for the elderly nowadays is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 254 words.
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people
believe that getting old is totaly
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totally
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I'll discuss both these points with examples and my own opinion.
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with,It is true that no one
like to getting
old and wants to Wrong verb form
get
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their Correct your spelling
continue
life
as a young.People
doing
different Wrong verb form
do
kind
of treatments and experiments to keep their Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
health
and appearence
as long as they can.I think it Correct your spelling
appearance
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they believe ,Add a missing verb
is because
when
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that when
getting
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the
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health
problems and dissabilities
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disabilities
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are also
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nowadays
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example,my mother is a Change the article
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middle age
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middle-aged
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and some medications because Replace the word
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of
she wants to spend her Change preposition
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life
independantly
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independently
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be concern
concern
about our future and need to plan Replace the word
concerned
every thing
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everything
such
as extra income,health
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and health
insurance
and need to make our last
ages without depend
on someone.
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government
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the government
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life
.They implemented better insurance
system ,hospitals ,elders
homes and nursing facilities for elder Fix the agreement mistake
elder
people
.For instance
, I remotely work in a
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the
insurance
sector in USA
and I have seen most of them Correct article usage
the USA
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their retirement Wrong verb form
plan
life
in the
middle age.They have engaged with Correct article usage
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insurance
plans and retirement plan
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plans
health
issues or economical
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economic
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lot
of things for elder Change the article
a lot
people
for
live without problems in Change preposition
to
their
future.
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To conclude
,getting old is something that every
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everyone
one
fiere
but the modern world Correct your spelling
faces
already
ready to Add a missing verb
is already
make
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take
necessory
actions to make elder Correct your spelling
necessary
people
happy.Submitted by thiliniranatunga1994 on
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