You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, say that life for the elderly nowadays is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 254 words.

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every
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one
like
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to
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live
as
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a
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young but
the
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getting old is
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human nature.Some
people
believe that getting old is
totaly
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totally
bad in the modern world.
On the other hand
,others say that it is much better than
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past.
However
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I agree with both these
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.In
this
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I'll discuss both these points with examples and my own opinion.
To begin
with,It is true that no
one
like to
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old and wants to
continoue
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continue
their
life
as a young.
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doing
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do
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different
kind
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of treatments and experiments to keep their
health
and
appearence
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appearance
as long as they can.I think it
because
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they believe ,
when
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that when
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getting
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old they have to depend on their children or someone.Not only that
the
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health
problems and
dissabilities
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disabilities
also
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major concerns.I have seen some older individuals having some bad experiences
now a days
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nowadays
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.As
a
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example,my mother is a
middle age
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women
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and she started to
do excercise
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and some medications because
of
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she wants to spend her
life
independantly
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independently
.My opinion is that we need to
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be concern
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concern
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about our future and need to plan
every thing
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everything
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such
as extra income,
health
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and health
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insurance
and need to make our
last
ages without
depend
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on someone.
On the other hand
,
Today
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government
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the government
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has
establish
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new rules and regulations for
every
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one
by
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concerning their
after
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retirement
life
.They implemented better
insurance
system ,hospitals ,
elders
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elder
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homes and nursing facilities for elder
people
.
For instance
, I remotely work in
a
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insurance
sector in
USA
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the USA
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and I have seen most of them
planned
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their retirement
life
in
the
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middle age.They have engaged with
insurance
plans and retirement
plan
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plans
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,in case of if they have to face some
health
issues or
economical
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issues in the future .
According to
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my point of view today governments implemented
lot
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a lot
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of things for elder
people
for
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to
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live without problems in
their
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the
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future.
To conclude
,getting old is something that
every
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everyone
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one
fiere
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faces
but the modern world
already
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is already
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ready to
make
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take
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necessory
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necessary
actions to make elder
people
happy.
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