Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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availability
is
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always become
serious
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a serious
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issue for all. It is believed by
few
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a few
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individuals that only
government
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the government
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can able to resolve housing shortages by their serious efforts. I completely agree with
this
notion to
the
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significant extent, and in the following essay, I will shed light on my
view point
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viewpoint
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. Housing requirement is
basic
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a basic
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necessity for every citizen.
To begin
with,
Government
forms
by election
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by promising to solve
locals
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locals'
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various problems
such
as
accommodation
and safety. To explain it
further
,
local
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the local
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ministry has all
socio economic
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powers to eliminate any kinds of issues that people used to face currently.
For example
, Year 2014 India’s new central
government
focused and
provided
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providing
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thousands of
accommodation
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accommodations
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to settle
community
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the community
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.
Moreover
,
Government
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the Government
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control's
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and can able to do
townplan
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town plan
in
order
arrange
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to arrange
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community living so all people can live coherently and
piecefully
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peacefully
. Because
of
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shortfall
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the shortfall
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on
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in
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house
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the house
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also
helps economically. To elaborate more, In
order
to construct more
accommodation
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
needs to
comeup
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come up
with new projects, which
ultimatley
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ultimately
leads
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lead
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to
increase
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foreign
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in foreign
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invenstment
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investment
and boost
economy
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the economy
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.
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, During 2014-2021 In India statewise ,
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rulling
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ruling
party invited and signed
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a memorendum
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memorendum
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memorandum
internationally and generated billions of
invenstment
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investments
.
Furthermore
,
This
way
government
not only helps the people
,
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but
also
make
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makes
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their position stronger as they can get
statstics
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statistical
information on poverty in
order
to consider them to issue new
houeses
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houses
house
. In conclusion, By looking
overall
perespective
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perspective
, I
would
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believe that
authority
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authorities
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by utilizing their power can able to come out
for
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with
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effective
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an effective
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solution in
order
to support
locals
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local
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various
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apply
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issue
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issues
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.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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