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In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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One
 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the
age
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parents
, which is significantly
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. It is undeniable that having a
first
child
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in
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an
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 older
age
is become
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becomes
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 an essential part of our
life
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.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
 find that they need
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 amount of money for the best
life
 of their baby,
while
 others
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 everything associated with the financial condition of the family negatively. Surely, there are both pros and cons to
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parent
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a parent
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in
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the
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 older
age
 but I believe
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
One
 of the main
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positives
positive
 of being a parent
in
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the
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an
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 older
age
 is that
people
 are more responsible for the
life
 of
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others rather than
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the
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 younger
age
. For
the
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 reason
that
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 birth of the
first
child
 is
one
 of the important, responsible and tough moments which is too hard to control for the younger person.
For instance
, we can compare the
life
 of
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 young individual who
does
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 not as confident in their decisions as the older person who has
the
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 large number of
life
experience
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experiences
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. Another advantage is that
mostly
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most
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 older
age
 person lives in better financial condition than younger individual, which
also
 plays
one
 of the crucial
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role
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 in the
infants
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infant's
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life
. Because
,
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first
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the first
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child
is always needs
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 a lot of money for their future development and good
life
. A good example here is
the
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todays
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today's
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situations
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situation
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 with the young
age
parents
 who are not as independent as the older
people
. Turning to
other
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 side of the argument, younger
age
parents
 are more active and
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 a lot of benefits than older
age
people
. Because
,
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 younger
age
 individuals are more versatile than older
parents
.
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 example, successful
people
are reach
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 their goals
in
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the
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a
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age
, which is
also
 beneficial for younger
parents
. Another major disadvantage of having a baby
in
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the
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an
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 older
age
 is that
difference
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the difference
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 between
ages
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the ages
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 of the
parents
 and
child
are
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 quite too big. Because
,
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 the difference between
age
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ages
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 is
also
 very important for the
first
child
.
For example
, nowadays children
has
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 a big difference between the ages of their
parents
, which
is affect
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for
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their way of thinking. Having
wighed
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weighed
 everything mentioned
up
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, we can come to
a
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 conclusion that it is a lot better to have a baby
in
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the
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a
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 younger
age
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Shift
  • Trend
  • Societal norms
  • Education and career
  • Financial stability
  • Reproductive technologies
  • Delayed marriages
  • Parenting responsibilities
  • Life expectancy
  • Family planning
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