the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four different modes of transport
The line graph presents how many
shops
started and stopped working in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the number
of shops
closed and opened in the given period changed dramatically and this
number
was lower in 2018 compared to in
2011.
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Initially
, there were about 8,500 new shops
in 2011, roughly 2000 more than those closed in the same year. In the following year, the proportion of shop openings dropped rapidly to fewer than half the number
in 2011 but soon resurged during the next two years to over 6,000 in 2014. Over the same time, the figure for shop closures showed some fluctuation and remained at about 6,500 till 2014, a few more than the new ones
.
From 2015 onward, there was a wild fluctuation in the quantity of shops
stopping their business while
the figure for the new startups witnessed a downward trend. The number
of new shops
reduced to 4000 in 2015, remaining unchanged over the next two years before another fall of about 1000 in 2018. Meanwhile, the statistics for those closed dropped wildly in 2015 to just about 500 ones
but rose back to over 5000 in 2016, overtaking the new Correct pronoun usage
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ones
and keeping stable till the end.
2015 witnessed a sudden dive in the quantities of shops
stopping their business to about 500 ones
. In the same year, the number
of new start-ups also
reduced, falling back to 4,000 shops
, which stayed stable till 2017 before another slight fall in 2018 to 3000Correct pronoun usage
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ones
. On the other hand
, there was a wild growth in the number
of closed shops
in 2016, reaching over 5,000 shops
, surpassing the number
of newly opened and remained unchanged to the end of the course.Submitted by Hiệu Nguyễn on
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