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the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four different modes of transport

the graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four different modes of transport
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The line graph presents how many
shops
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 started and stopped working in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 closed and opened in the given period changed dramatically and
this
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number
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 was lower in 2018 compared to
in
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2011.
Initially
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, there were about 8,500 new
shops
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 in 2011, roughly 2000 more than those closed in the same year. In the following year, the proportion of shop openings dropped rapidly to fewer than half the
number
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 in 2011 but soon resurged during the next two years to over 6,000 in 2014. Over the same time, the figure for shop closures showed some fluctuation and remained at about 6,500 till 2014, a few more than the new
ones
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. From 2015 onward, there was a wild fluctuation in the quantity of
shops
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 stopping their business
while
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 the figure for the new startups witnessed a downward trend. The
number
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 of new
shops
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 reduced to 4000 in 2015, remaining unchanged over the next two years before another fall of about 1000 in 2018. Meanwhile, the statistics for those closed dropped wildly in 2015 to just about 500
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ones
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but rose back to over 5000 in 2016, overtaking the new
ones
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 and keeping stable till the end. 2015 witnessed a sudden dive in the quantities of
shops
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 stopping their business to about 500
ones
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. In the same year, the
number
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 of new start-ups
also
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 reduced, falling back to 4,000
shops
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, which stayed stable till 2017 before another slight fall in 2018 to 3000
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ones
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.
On the other hand
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, there was a wild growth in the
number
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 of closed
shops
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 in 2016, reaching over 5,000
shops
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, surpassing the
number
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 of newly opened and remained unchanged to the end of the course.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number, ones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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