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The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.

The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.
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The supplied bar chart represents the proportion of
males
 and females who
lives
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 in penury condition in the USA in 2008 in 10 different
age
range
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ranges
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.
Overall
,
middle aged
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middle-aged
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 citizens (45-54) were not in need of money compared to both genders under
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the age
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age
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the age
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 of 5
that
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who
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 experienced
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a peak
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peak
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a peak
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rate
 of poorness. Turning to the details, both sexes under
age
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the age
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 of 5 faced the highest proportion of poorness with
the
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a
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rate
 of 20%, which was equivalent to the double share of
males
 25-34
age
 category (10%).
Then
 throughout growing up (5-17) the number of poor youngsters had a gradual drop (about 16%), which was approximately equaled to 18-24 with the proportion of 15%. It is interesting to note that, the number of men in the
age
 of 45-54 and 55-59, and 60-64, 65-74 percentage of females were in the same
rate
 of poverty.
Due to
age
 classification 65-74 and 75 and up were less indicated
males
 on money necessity. Looking at the details of women, 18-24
age
 groups were the
most
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highest in the level of need (over 20%), which was doubled to the 60-64 aged females. Young girls aged 5-17
was
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were
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 over 15%, which had a slight difference with boys. Women aged 25-34
was
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were
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 in the stable
rate
 that made up 15%,
while
 the next
age
 category (35-44)
experience
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experienced
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 a rapid decrease.
In contrast
 to
males
, other aged women classifications were in the small portion, which had
a tiny differences
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tiny differences
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 with
males
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, age, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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