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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say how important New Year is to people in your country describe how New Year is celebrated in your country explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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 working for a large
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 is better than working for a small
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 is a controversial
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. From my everyday experience and observation, I think that every option has its advantages and disadvantages. I base my opinion on the following points.
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 the
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 side working for a large
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 brings many benefits. First of all,
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 has better medical insurance
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 salary. Often employees of a large
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 have less responsibility.
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, they feel more secure because their
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 has more clients and
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 means
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 chance to survive
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 the modern market.
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 working for a large
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 has less chance to be promoted because
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's manager does not want to lose his or her job unless she or he is promoted too.
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, from my observation, managers of a large
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 do not pay much attention to
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's solutions and suggestions.
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 the other side working for a small
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 has many advantages too.
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,
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 has
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 chance to be promoted.
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,
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 can talk to the owner of the
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 about any improvements that can be
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 in order to get more profit. Another important aspect of working for a small
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 is the
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 to find out more about how a
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 works.
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 of
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 can gain more experience and get better recommendations.
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,
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 has some disadvantages.
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,
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 can get less salary, worse medical benefits, etc.
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, I think that every person chooses for himself what he or she wants. If
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 wants a better career and more responsibilities
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 a small
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 is a better choice.
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, working for a large
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 may be a good option too.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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