Some children spen hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Few kids spend most of
the
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time
on their phone
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phones
Because of technology
has brought many Change preposition
Technology
type
of Change to a plural noun
types
game
, social Fix the agreement mistake
games
apps
and many fetures
that Correct your spelling
features
children
do many thing
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things
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a smartphone
smartphone
. In my Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
opinion
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,opinion
this
is a negative development
. I will explain why it is bad
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a bad
development
.
To begin
with, Nowadays the smartphone
has completely changed our life. For example
, it has so many types of games and social apps
which does
not only draw Verb problem
that
children
's focus but also
keep busy
on phones all day long. Correct pronoun usage
them busy
For instance
, my brother always plays pubG
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pub
game
on Fix the agreement mistake
games
mobile
and his study Correct pronoun usage
his mobile
time
has significantly reduced because of gaming on telephone
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the telephone
In addition
, smartphone
has youtube, Add an article
the smartphone
facebook
and Instagram, Capitalize word
Facebook
this
kind of app encourages
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that encourages
to
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apply
children
to stay on mobile phones and keep using these apps
,
In addition
, I think this
is negative
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a negative
development
because they are using social sites in the wrong way instead
of the right use
. For example
, on Add a comma
,youtube
youtube
they can watch videos related to their study but they are watching movies and nonsense videos and Correct your spelling
YouTube
waisting
their important Correct your spelling
wasting
time
of life which is suppose
to Change the form of the verb
supposed
use
to gain knowledge. Wrong verb form
be used
Furthermore
, some kinds of apps
are encouraging children
to use
smartphones by offering money. PubG games pay money to children
if they play well. We need to control our child to use
smartphones and limit their time
for playing on phones.
In conclusion, spending time
on a smartphone
is negative
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a negative
development
because even if there are good and knowledgeable apps
, they are not using them in a good manner and use
them the wrong way wasting valuable time
of life.Submitted by gelbu2021 on
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