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Some children spen hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#children #spen #hours #smartphones #case #development
Few kids spend most of
the
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their
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time
 on their
phone
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phones
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.
Because of technology
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Technology
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 has brought many
type
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types
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 of
game
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games
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, social
apps
 and many
fetures
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features
 that
children
 do many
thing
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things
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 on
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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. In my
opinion
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this
 is a negative
development
. I will explain why it is
bad
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a bad
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development
.
To begin
 with, Nowadays the
smartphone
 has completely changed our life.
For example
, it has so many types of games and social
apps
which does
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that
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 not only draw
children
's focus but
also
 keep
busy
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them busy
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 on phones all day long.
For instance
, my brother always plays
pubG
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pub
game
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games
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 on
mobile
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his mobile
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 and his study
time
 has significantly reduced because of gaming on
telephone
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the telephone
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.
In addition
,
smartphone
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the smartphone
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 has youtube,
facebook
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Facebook
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 and Instagram,
this
 kind of app
encourages
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that encourages
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to
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apply
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children
 to stay on mobile phones and keep using these
apps
,
In addition
, I think
this
 is
negative
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a negative
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development
 because they are using social sites in the wrong way
instead
 of the right
use
.
For example
, on
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,youtube
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youtube
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YouTube
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 they can watch videos related to their study but they are watching movies and nonsense videos and
waisting
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wasting
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 their important
time
 of life which is
suppose
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supposed
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 to
use
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be used
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 to gain knowledge.
Furthermore
, some kinds of
apps
 are encouraging
children
 to
use
 smartphones by offering money. PubG games pay money to
children
 if they play well. We need to control our child to
use
 smartphones and limit their
time
 for playing on phones. In conclusion, spending
time
 on a
smartphone
 is
negative
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a negative
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development
 because even if there are good and knowledgeable
apps
, they are not using them in a good manner and
use
 them the wrong way wasting valuable
time
 of life.
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