Doctors in many countries are saying that people are not getting enough physical exercise. What are the causes of this and how it can be addressed​?

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Health is
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and foremost priority for everyone to live happily. It is believed by a few individuals that as per medical practitioner
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most of the public is unable to receive proper physical exercise.
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and propose some solutions to alleviate them. The reason behind
this
cause is the lack of awareness among people about the benefits of exercise. To explain it
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is always tied up with their priorities and always comments negatively about starting a gym.
This
is mainly
due to
less information , on how a physical workout reduces their hospital visits.
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WHO's latest 2023, and post-pandemic report
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that, globally ten per cent of people have complete information on exercise and its advantages. Despite the above causes to tackle
this
problem, there are a plethora of possible measures to overcome
this
condition.
To begin
with, the Government needs to look seriously at
this
issue and the Ministry of Medical
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to intervene by issuing serious advice to all companies to ask each and every person to spend at least thirty minutes on physical activity.
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, various training on how to become healthy
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also
needs to be provided by the human resource department.
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, Global Multinational company
such
as Google, Microsoft and Facebook have their own in-house gymnasium so the employee can
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. In conclusion, It is been proven that there are merits of physical work provided, everyone should know much about it. The solution to
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problem is
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administration
by joining
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hands with organizations can take positive steps, can solve
community's
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common issue
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health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • technology dependence
  • work-life balance
  • awareness
  • education
  • recreational facilities
  • social media
  • entertainment
  • unhealthy food choices
  • fast food
  • injuries
  • accidents
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • government policies
  • investments
  • physical activity
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