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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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Two maps illustrate information about
Industrial
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the Industrial
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area
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 in
Norbiton
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 between current
condition
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conditions
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 and
future
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plan
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plans
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 of development.
Overall
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, in the
future
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 industrial
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area
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areas
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it doesn’t
Verb problem
won’t
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 exist
then
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change
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 to become living
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area
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areas
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.
To begin
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, there is no
change
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a
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to a
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big roundabout in the
center
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centre
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 of
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Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial
area
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. There are two sides of the factories, one is near
roundabout
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the roundabout
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 and the
others
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other
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 on the east of
roundabout
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the roundabout
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. In the
future
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, the factories will
demolish
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be demolished
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then
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and then
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change
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changed
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 to become living
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area
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areas
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. In the corner on the east side of a big roundabout, there will
build
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be
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 a school. In front of
school
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the school
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, there is a complex housing
area
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 along the street.
Playground
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The playground
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 will
build
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be built
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 on the north of
housing
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the housing
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.
Moreover
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, Shops and Medical
center
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centers
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 will
build
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be built
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 near a big roundabout. On the
north-west
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northwest
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 of the roundabout, there are
also
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 three
housing
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houses
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 that will
build
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be built
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 in the
future
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.
Furthermore
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, on the north side of the
Norbiton
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 industrial
area
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, there is a river where the next river is
a
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apply
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farmland. In
the
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apply
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future
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 development, there is a new road extended from
roundabout
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the roundabout
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 to the north
area
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 crossing the river to access the farmland
area
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.
Thus
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, the farmland
area
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 will
replace
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be replaced
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to
Verb problem
with
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change
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 a residential
area
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. On the south of the
roundabout
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,roundabout
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 there will
build
Verb problem
be
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 a small roundabout.
In addition
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, on the west of
Norbiton
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area
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still
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is still
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 a town.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, norbiton, future, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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