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These days, many countries show interest in space exploration. What are the advantages and disadvantages of space exploration.

#countries #show #interest #space #exploration
Nowadays,
considerable
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 amount of
money
invest
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on
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in
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space
travel
 by many countries. there are certain benefits to
spent
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money
 in
space
such
 as
prediction
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the prediction
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 of
weather
 and other scientific discoveries but there are some drawbacks too.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate
both
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on both
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pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
space
exploration
.
To begin
 with, There is a plethora of advantages
of
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exploration
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the exploration
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 of
cosmos
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the cosmos
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. First and foremost is
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a forcast
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forcast
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forecast
 of
weather
.
In other words
,
Space
 crafts
helps
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 to predict
a
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weather
accuratelyand
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accurately and
 it will help to overcome and to get
necessery
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necessary
 precautions for harsh climate changes.
For instance
, because of
space ships
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spaceships
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 and
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satellite
satellites
satelite
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 we can know upcoming
weather
alert
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alerts
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 and people can prepare and take some precautions for some hazardous
situation
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situations
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.
In addition
,
exploration
 of
universe
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the universe
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 can help
to
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us to
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 know
about
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that
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 life
exist
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that exist
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 on
other planet
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another planet
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such
 as
moon
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the moon
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 and
mars
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.
Furthermore
, Technological advancement
hepls
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helps
 to create new innovations like GPS ,
satelite
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satellite
 communication ,
media
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and media
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 imaging.
Lastly
 ,
space
travel
 creates various job
opportunity
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opportunities
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.
Hence
 economy of
country
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the country
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 will
boost
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. There are obvious drawbacks of
space
travel
 too.
Firstly
,
space
travel
 machine is really high cost. Some people believe that investing
on
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in
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this
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these
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 humongous
space ships
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spaceships
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 is
waste
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a waste
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 of
money
 and time as there are other pressing
concern
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concerns
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 to look after
such
 as poverty and hunger. Not only
this
, the government should
spent
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money
 on better healthcare and
eduaction
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education
 as
space
exploration
 will not come
handy
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in handy
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 in some serious situations
such
 as financial
crisis
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crises
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 and to boost
economy
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the economy
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 of
country
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the country
a country
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.
Space
travel
also
impact
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 the
enviroment
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environment
 as
space
 ships
creates
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 pollution and depletion of ozone in
upper
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the upper
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 atmosphere.
Moreover
, cosmos
exploration
jeaoprdise
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jeopardise
jeopardize
 national security risks as it can
be use
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be used
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 as
military
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a military
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mision
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mission
.
To conclude
, more and more countries investing
money
on
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in
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space
travel
. There are advantages like
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the predictment
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predictment
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prediction
 of upcoming events and other scientific
discovery
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discoveries
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 but it has some disadvantages
such
 as high cost.
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