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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or sortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many
people
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 tend to have a
job
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 that does not fulfil their
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 with gratification, or the salary is not enough as it should be.
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 some others try to reach their goals,
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 a proper monthly pay or improved working hours. I maintain that every person should look for the perfect conditions in their work, even if that means that they should change a
job
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. In
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 essay, I will demonstrate both views, as well I will give my opinion. In times of austerity, resulting from the pandemic that we recently have been through,
people
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 set as a priority to offer to their family the most valuable kinds of stuff, (like
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 and food), at any cost.
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 more
people
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 stay in a workplace where they consider themselves unhappy.
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, most
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 may stay in a
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, because they are afraid of trying something new and unknown for them.
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, they prefer, getting a salary that they don't actually deserve or even working unpaid overtime, rather than risk and have a chance to be in a better
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.
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, other
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 find that a
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 is an essential aspect of their
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, as they spend over one-third of their day.
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, they will do anything to improve any situations that get them far away from satisfaction.
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, finding work that provides you a more respectful salary, gives you the opportunity to live a more luxurious
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. Having that in mind, individuals put their efforts into finding the perfect
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 for them.
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,
people
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 take risks and quit their position, in order to have higher chances of achieving their goals, which might be a higher money per month and fewer working hours. In a nutshell, the role of a satisfactory
job
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 plays a major role in our
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. I strongly believe that
people
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 should try and change a situation that don't like, even if that means that they have to take a risk. Our aim should be our mental health, and without work that provides us satisfaction, we will be unable to have it. So
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 should chase better working conditions.
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