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The table chart shows the percentage of members of parliament who were women in 1990,1997,2005.

The table chart shows the percentage of members of parliament who were women in 1990,1997,2005.
The table chart shows the percentage of members of parliament who were women in 1990,1997,2005. In general, Almost there have upward trend. Oceania
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least
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 percentage and East
Asia
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have
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highest
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. From 1990 to 1997 there was almost a slight upward trend. Oceania and Southeast
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Asia
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 increased
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% from 1.2% to 1.6% and from 10.4% to 10.8%. And North Africa grew by 0.2% from 1.6% to 1.8%. Latin America the most from 1990 to 1997 at 0.9% from 11.5% to 12.4%. East
Asia
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 decreased by 0.9% from 20.2% to 19.3 and the world
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 dropped by 1% from 12.4 to 11.4. From 1997 to 2005 there was a strong upward trend. Oceania increased slightly by 1.4% from 1.6% to 3.0%.North Africa increased by 6.7% from 1.8% to 8.5%. South East
Asia
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 increased by 4.7% from 10.8% to 15.5%. Latin America increased by 6.6% from 12.4% to 19.0%. East
Asia
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 increased slightly by 0.1%.
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 grew by 4.5%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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