Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discussion both views and give your opinion.

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Excessive amount of

junk

food

really affects our health badly in the long term, as proven by research. In my view, I agree that the public should be acknowledged of the negative effects of fast

food

, so they will lower their daily intake of fast

food

and prevent

further

harm. On the one hand, most

people

only eat what they desire. It's rare that

people

choose what they will eat thoughtfully. The reason behind

this

phenomenon because they might not fully perceive if the body can respond negatively to certain foods, especially

junk

food

. So, the resolution of

this

problem will be educating

people

and the one who will be in charge is the government.

Therefore

, a person

that is

already aware of the disadvantages of having

junk

food

every day, might lower their consumption of it.

For example

, a person who has learned how the body works might have less fried

food

than other

people

who don'

know the pitfall of having fast

food

, simply because they know how horrible the effects of consuming it

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are.

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On the contrary

, some believe the educational information about

junk

food

doesn'

reduce the amount of

people

that eat over-processed meals. They think that education will do nothing unless they have greater motivation and willingness to implement the educational theory in their life.

For example

, several

people

can'

control their daily intake of

junk

food

and have an uncontrollable addiction to fast

food

even though they already

acknowledged

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that it can damage their health.

To sum up

, having enough information about how over-processed

food

affects our body horribly, will more likely help us to decrease our desire to eat it than those that don'

have the knowledge at all.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

nutritional awareness
health education
informed choices
dietary habits
public health campaigns
preventative measures
regulatory measures
restrictive policies
food industry practices
accessibility
affordability
food deserts
health outcomes
behavioral change
societal attitudes
health risks
chronic diseases
lifestyle choices

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