The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Japan’s population: past, present and future trends.

The chart and  table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Japan’s population: past, present and future trends.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart and table provide information about how many people live in Japan.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is noticeable that the proportion of the total
population
Use synonyms
will be highest in 2055 ,
while
Linking Words
in 1950 was the lowest.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the
population
Use synonyms
of millions of people in Japan will be the largest,
whereas
Linking Words
in 1950 was the smallest.
To begin
Linking Words
with
population
Use synonyms
( millions) , accounted for 84.1 which rose gradually to 104,6 in 1970.
Therefore
Linking Words
, it showed a negligible increase to 123,6 in 1990 and maintained the same level during the next 15 years . It is predicted that it will drop significantly to 110 in 2035 and,
therefore
Linking Words
89,9 in 2055. With regards to over-65s, the
population
Use synonyms
( million) in 2005 was 25,7 which is over 6 times larger than in 1950 (4.1).
Consequently
Linking Words
, in 2035 and 2055 there will be shared similar numbers, namely 37.2 and 36.5 roughly. In terms of percentage of the
population
Use synonyms
, it accounted for 20 % in 2005 twice as much as in 2055 (41%).
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the proportion of the public will be 34 % in 2035,
whereas
Linking Words
in 1950 was only 4.9%
Submitted by dimash171206 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "therefore, whereas".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: