Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion
Nowadays, location
one
thing can be seen that many heritage
sites have turned into tourist attractions.Having some debate related to the protection of the places where more people
come has the same meaning that more destruction will appear.In contrast
, when the cultures become well-known,it
will be Correct pronoun usage
they
more safety
.Correct word choice
safe
This
essay below shows both sides and gives individual about this
problem
With the first statement, one
thing can know
clearly is anything in the world is affected by time so it needs to Wrong verb form
be known
maintain
to survive, when Wrong verb form
be maintained
one
place becomes popular, it will be given more attention by people
. For example
, a tower was built in
many centuries ago, Change preposition
apply
it's
status is Replace the word
its
very
bad bow and Add an article
a very
the very
predict
to destroy Wrong verb form
predicted
in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
next
years, it Correct article usage
the next
need
Change the verb form
needs
prepair
but if nobody Correct your spelling
repair
prepare
care
about Change the verb form
cares
this
due to
the low advantages it bringing
, the culture will Wrong verb form
brings
dissapear
.But when it Correct your spelling
disappear
have
merit on investors, they will Change the verb form
has
be
do anything to keep that.Unnecessary verb
apply
Moreover
, when the heritage
become
famous, when the bad harmful Wrong verb form
becomes
affect
to Correct your spelling
effects
this
, some criticise come from citizen
will send to Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
, it was a big pressure and they must take some actions to make it great again.
Correct your spelling
government
Turn
to Wrong verb form
Turning
second
thesis, Change the article
the second
people
will destroy the cultures.First,
one
factor that it
is wrong when think anybody Correct pronoun usage
apply
have
the awareness, we can easily Change the verb form
has
to
see many graphic Fix the infinitive
apply
paints
on the wall Replace the word
painted
in
everywhere, so that when Change preposition
apply
heritage
sites are opened for tourist, many harmful action
can happen and the cultures will be lost Change to a plural noun
actions
it's
value.Replace the word
its
In addition
, when tourist travel to this
places, they bring plastic Correct determiner usage
these
such
as glass, bowl, etc,... and throw it unwittingly, trash apear
and the building is Correct your spelling
appears
poluted
,in Correct your spelling
polluted
short
time it Add an article
the short
a short
turn
Change the verb form
turns
to
Change preposition
into
useless
place and nobody want to come.
In my opinion, the arts must be opened to Correct article usage
a useless
people
due to
the knowledge it
bring.We can know more about how our Correct pronoun usage
they
ancestor
Fix the agreement mistake
ancestors
live
,Wrong verb form
lived
what
traditional Correct word choice
and what
which
country Correct pronoun usage
apply
attend
Wrong verb form
attended
to
.But when to do that, we need the strict rule, well fine when illegal actions are taken and the culture will Change preposition
apply
brought
more income toChange the verb form
bring
be brought
Add an article
the
Thus
, heritage
should be opened to become popular rather than do not care about this
and let it dissapear
from the world.The things Correct your spelling
disappear
people
need do
is maintain Fix the infinitive
to do
Correct your spelling
usually
ussually
,protect it by Correct your spelling
usually
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articles
articals
, improve awarenessCorrect your spelling
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