Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is argued that
culture
which is applied
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receive
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income can
be
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easily
gained
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negative
effect
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.
Also
, there are others who hold the opinion that it is the only solution to save the
culture
. Both perspectives hold valid justifications,
however
, I find myself inclining towards the latter stance. One key
arguement
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argument
is that the number of tourists is one of the
aim
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reason
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reasons
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that lead to
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disintegration of the
culture
. Tourists tend to harm the environment because of their
interested
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.
For example
, nowadays,
people
would like
visiting
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wildlife safari,
because
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of that, lots of
safari
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were opened to satisfy
people
's
requirement
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requirements
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.
As a result
, it lead to the disturbance of animals's life and have a detrimental effect on the life cycle of the environment.
Conversely
, there are
people
who hold the view that mass
tourism
is one of the best
way
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to save traditional values. The reason is that the finance that
tourism
gained can be used to rectify the problems of
cutural
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cultural
heritages.
For instance
, the profit of
tourism
can be applied
for
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a
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refurbishment of
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temples,
the
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castles and so on. Another
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reason is that
tourism
also
help
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to increase the revenue generation of the nation , so that it would be more grant to reinvest in the
culture
of ethnic. In conclusion,
while
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both viewpoints present valid reasons and can be justified. I think that
people
should develop
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tourists
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activities to gain enough finance to maintain our cultural values.
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