Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is thought that

culture

is the main source of

earning

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for

tourism

,

while

critics admit that

tourism

assure

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the

maintanance

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maintenance

of

culture

. I am more inclined toward the first view and will explain the reasons for my options in the following paragraphs.

To begin

with, first and

the

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foremost,

culture

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cultures

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which are likely to

be vanished

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vanish

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are being assist

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from

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by

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people

all over the

countries

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country

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.

These

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This culture

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culture

will be known by

people

via

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the internet

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internet

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.

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,

while

the middle part of

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agriculture

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agricultural

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culture

is endangered by the flood,

the

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people

from all

the

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part

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of the

contries

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countries

put all of their effort and dedication

with

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a

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hope

to support

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of supporting

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them.

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,

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in the

morden

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modern

time

are

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studying

about

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culture

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the culture

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at school, they

was

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taught to preserve and enhance them as a priceless fortune of their country town.

Consequently

, there are

another way

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other ways

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to protect the

culture

, but some of them will

be disappeared

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without the help of

the

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tourism

.

On the other hand

, there are a great majority of countries are persuading

tourist

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tourists

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to experience the ethnic area.

This

lead

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leads

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to funds from

tourism

to improve the standard of living for ethnic

people

and bring their

countries

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country's

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beauty to the world.

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,

tourism

contract

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people

to pay attention

on

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the poverty areas to assist them.

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, most of the

tourism

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tourist

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attraction was found

nearby

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near

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the poverty areas or the community center that can gain tourist attention for assistance.

Therefore

, the

tourism

business is in

favor

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favour

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of

economic

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the economic

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field in maintaining the

culture

. In conclusion,

this

essay discussed the reasons how

traveling

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mitigates many

country's

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countries'

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cultures.

Besides

that,

this

essay suggests other ways to protect the

culture

. In my opinion,

culture

can be saved by the

economy

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contribution from

tourism

.

However

, citizen

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themselves

themselve

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themselves

have to step on their own feet and find a way to preserve their

culture