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Information technology enables peeople to do their work outside thier workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern era, It is undeniable that
technology
 helps
people
 to
work
 from their homes or when they are travelling. Many
people
 think that
technology
 is helpful for
people
 who are working outside their office. I personally agree that
people
 are helped by
technology
 to
work
 anywhere. One of the disadvantages of advanced
technology
 for
workers
 is
workers
 do not have
time
 to spend
time
 with their family at home.
This
 is because they use their
time
 to do their job at home.
On the other hand
,
workers
 do not have quality
time
. Some employees tend to spend their
time
 working on their jobs in front of the computer on their off day on Sunday. Despite the drawbacks, we cannot deny that sophisticated
technology
 brings benefits for
people
 because they can
work
 two jobs a day in different places. A great example is a housewife, she cannot attend the meeting because one of her children is sick. In
this
 situation, even though she is not present at the office, she is able to do her job, which she has to finish on that day. Another benefit of advanced
technology
 is that
people
 are able to contribute at
work
, even though they are not in the office.
People
 are able to
work
while
 on holiday. or when they are at the airport.
For example
, as a programmer, he can create an application
while
 he is on the sea, travelling overseas. All in all. It is undeniable that every coin has two sides, in
this
 case is
technology
. Even Though there is a negative impact on
workers
' working performance, I personally believe that the benefits drawback the disadvantages.
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